The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. Desi video The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… You’ve got the story-telling part down (done right) but your mistakes in the sentences kinda threw things off for me. I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. 3 comments«1»animal99Report 2013-11-30 15:04:15I had to log in to write this:
I really enjoyed your story. The only bad thing I found that should be addressed is that you should proof-read it a few times before publishing it. 3 comments«1»animal99Report 2013-11-30 15:04:15I had to log in to write this:
I really enjoyed your story. I’m afraid that is why your approval score is lower than I expected. There were a few things wrong with
