Thanks !! Desi video It really needs a rewrite and repost .anonymous readerReport 2013-05-22 19:37:04For awhile I thought it was a girl with the complaining and all try and state the sex in the beginning please«12» Continue on with this and I’ll read every word. Continue on with this and I’ll read every word. (countrycadillac)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-22 20:48:18The premise is good but there are many errors. (countrycadillac)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-22 20:48:18The premise is good but there are many errors. Thanks !! Continue on with this and I’ll read every word. Continue on with this and I’ll read every word. 7 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-23 22:44:43A bunch of errors in the first para are not a good start
Did u not proof read or spellcheck???anonymous readerReport 2013-05-23 14:18:11Make a little longer b4 you end it.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-23 10:19:20Great story line but it ended too soon. (countrycadillac)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-22 20:48:18The premise is good but there are many errors. It really needs a rewrite and repost .anonymous readerReport 2013-05-22 19:37:04For awhile I thought it
